2015年徐汇区中考一模英语作文范文
假设你正在国外参加教育交流访问活动，你需要做一个简短的、让人印象深刻的自我介绍。请写一篇至少60个词的发言稿介绍一下你自己(Danny)或者你的国家和学校(ABC school)
Ø 莎莎老师范文：
Self-Introduction
Ladies and gentlemen, it is my honor to participate in this education and exchange activity. My name is Danny, a student of China’s ABC school. As you can tell from my smile, I am an easy-going boy with a warm heart, ①who always tries his best to help friends or even strangers. ②If you ask me how I can be such a considerate student, I will tell you it is owing to the cultivation in China. ③As the old saying goes ‘a friend in need is a friend indeed’, we are taught to ④give a hand to those who are in trouble during our growth. ⑤What’s more, whether a student is willing to help others is one of the most essential evaluations in our school. ⑥It is these valuable traditions that shape me. ⑤In summary, I‘d like to thank you for this platform. of communication and hope you will feel the same enthusiasm next time when you come to China.
Ø 内容分析：
本文要求考生做一个令人印象深刻的自我介绍，所以切忌流水账，比如直白地描写性别、年龄、爱好等。我们需要找出自己性格特征中的亮点并结合国外交流活动这个场合进行介绍，如果能顺便穿插中华文化、学校特色，则更能显示自我介绍的国际性、推广性。
Ø 精彩亮点分析：
亮点一: 非限制性定语从句是人物描写的有利武器，可以将人物特征以形容词、介词短语后置和非限制性定语从句三种形式融汇到一句句子中。
亮点二：条件状语从句，注意时态的主将从现。
亮点三：使用谚语增加文章语句多样性，且该句承上启下，开始由个人介绍过渡到学校、中国文化。
亮点四：巧用动词词组，“伸出援手”形象生动。
亮点五：连接词句简洁易懂，有递进、有总结，使文章层次分明。
亮点六：用强调句加强语气，使自我介绍更有说服力。
